1 Name: Anonymous : 2007-03-30 13:31 [Del]
This is not some sort of "copypasta" (well, actually it is, because I incorrectly posted it in /dis/ at first). I wrote this straight out of one of my many perverted fantasies, right in this box on Gurochan.
The cute, hot teenager Annie has lots of friends, boyfriends and has a high intelligence. She's active with physical sports, is social, sweet, etc.
The local pervert psychopath knows about her, and can't stand it! This little slut must be... taken care of.
One day, when she's on her way home from school, he simply drives by with his van, jumps out and quickly kidnaps her. Nobody sees it. She's put unconscious into a carpet, and brought in to his house nearby. He even greets his friendly neighbour while carrying in the carpet.
When she wakes up, she's all tied up in his soundproof basement. He immediately begins to saw off her limbs, making it as painful and slow as possibe, spanning several hours. She screams for help, cries and pleads for mercy, but he just continues, putting salt on to stop the blood flood etc.
She eventually passes out. When she wakes up, she just has four stumps where her arms and legs used to be, with strange metallic plates attached to the ends. They in turn have small hooks attached to them.
She goes crazy and screams, vobbling her limbs around, unable to move an inch, and is really furious and frustrated at this point. She can't believe what has happened! He just smirks.
"Well, well, well... I guess you're not gonna be able to do anything fun for the rest of your life, even if you manage to escape from here, which isn't gonna happen. Fucking slut. How do you like that? >:D" he says.
She starts screaming and kicking (with no effect) and he locks his basement door (which is well hidden and impossible to hear even loud, loud music through) and goes to the hardware store to buy some nice chains and other tools that will be needed.
As he returns, he finds the girl on the floor, with her face laying down, unable to turn back around from the pain and lack of limbs.
"You've been disobedient." he says, and she shakes out of fear, silently praying for mercy. He looks at the death machine made up by chains going from the floor to the ceiling and several torture tools laying on the large table.
"I think I'll rape you now."
He now lives out every sexual fantasy he has had about teenage girls, and she can't do a thing. Anal, oral, vaginal, spanking, beating, scat, you name it!
Afterwards, he cleans her with a hose. "You're my little bitch now, and you will be for at least the next ten years. Then you're probably too old for my taste, and I will find a nice way to slaughter you. Or maybe I will keep you alive just for fun, watching you slowly die from hunger/thirst as my little wall decoration? You would make good furniture.
But don't fear. I will probably have found you a little friend or two in the mean time..."
Within a few months, he has a stable of loli slaves with no limbs, living as livestock in his basement, fed from bowls with dogfood (it's cheap and works great in his opinion). He usually grinds their own limbs and mixes in with the dog food and then forces them to eat it. That's one of his favorite parts. It makes him heard in no time.
Several times a day, he enters his chamber of horror to spank the living shit out of the slave girls, ride them like ponnies, humiliate them and torture them. He likes to fuck them in the ass while helplessly flapping their limbs around. Sometimes they are attached to the chains. Sometimes he uses a collar and let them walk around in his house, but only one at a time, and only ever with the necessary security measure of a gag ball. He likes to regularly give them a false sense of hope... it keeps them more obedient.
He often leaves them laying around for many hours on end. They can't move much while in their cages, and usually don't speak of escaping as they know that it would be entirely impossible, and even if they made it, it would be extremely humiliating and their lives would never go back to what they were before.
They hate him but quite frankly are entirely powerless against him. Also, their futile escape attempts usually end up with them all being spanked, beaten and fucked nearly to death. Which turns the others against the newbiew who tried to escape. It is not a wise idea.
So... what did you think? Yes, I'm sick. And no, I would probably not be able to do this IRL. But it's so sexy... IMO.
Hope you like it.
2 Name: Yuna : 2007-03-30 14:49 [Del]
Emoticons in a story? ...Ick. A -1. Otherwise the story is wonderful, even though it's exceedingly vague on the details. I would've loved to know more about the girls, how they live their day-to-day lives, cope with one another, etc.
And, this is just prolly me, but I found it to be rather formulaic. Of course he enjoys beating all the girls constantly, ever a violent man. Might've been better had it gone in a slightly different direction.
Otherwise, I enjoyed reading it.
3 Name: Anonymous : 2007-03-30 15:38 [Del]
Thank you, Yuna! Well... I now read it through again, and I agree that it feels a little... well... short. I also noticed several typos and realized that I forgot the "marking" part (in which he "marks" his livestock -- sorry, but I don't know the technical term).
Consider this a dirty, first draft. Maybe somebody can help making this better or completely rewrite it. It didn't take me long to write, and I'm sure I could come up with a really great, long story if I tried. Hmm...
"It makes him heard in no time." <-- This is supposed to be "hard". And a few other errors I won't bother fixing right now.
4 Name: Yuna : 2007-03-30 17:08 [Del]
-hugs- You're welcome, luv! Concrit in the guro community -- all for bettering one's descriptions of cute lolis crying. ;D We all have our rough drafts and our good/bad days at writin'.
If it helps any, I did have a nice lil, uh, whatever-the-female-term-is-for-'fwap'. Odd since I'm not usually into torturing lolis. My mind went off into its own lil fantasy, though, but based around the same idea. Hmm, maybe I'll write it up...
